She is shy
wonder at the transformation,
now sweet sixteen.
Inside the Church
was he completely transformed
his first visit.
(First and third line interchangeable)
Written for Carpe Diem #610, Transformation (2nd Vision Quest, 3rd day)
wonder at the transformation,
now sweet sixteen.
Inside the Church
was he completely transformed
his first visit.
(First and third line interchangeable)
Written for Carpe Diem #610, Transformation (2nd Vision Quest, 3rd day)
Very nice Usha! :D
ReplyDeleteThank you Jen.
DeleteSpectacular interchangeability Usha! Wonderful!
ReplyDeleteHank
Thanks Hank. Glad you liked the Haiku.
DeleteTransformation by a first visit to a Church?...Unlikely !:)
ReplyDeleteThanks Rallentanda. I personally know a person who changed after visiting the the church once.
DeleteThe poem has an interesting flexible form and I like your meaningful stanzas.
ReplyDeleteThank you Michelle.
DeleteInteresting takes on 'transformation' for your haiku Usha, and I like the fact that the first and third lines are interchangeable: that's cool! ;) <3
ReplyDeleteThank you Elly for such sweet comments.<3
DeleteTransformation is necessary.
ReplyDeleteThank you Amrit.
DeleteSo crisp and concise, very meaningul.
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot Asha.
DeleteMeaningful especially the first one in teens.
ReplyDeleteThanks Sarala.
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