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Sunday 23 November 2014

Carpe Diem #610, Transformation

                                                                               She is shy
                                                                  wonder at the transformation,
                                                                           now sweet sixteen.

         



                                                                  Inside the Church
                                                        was he completely transformed
                                                                 his  first  visit.

   (First and third line interchangeable)




Written for  Carpe Diem #610, Transformation (2nd Vision Quest, 3rd day)

16 comments:

  1. Very nice Usha! :D

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  2. Spectacular interchangeability Usha! Wonderful!

    Hank

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  3. Transformation by a first visit to a Church?...Unlikely !:)

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    1. Thanks Rallentanda. I personally know a person who changed after visiting the the church once.

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  4. The poem has an interesting flexible form and I like your meaningful stanzas.

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  5. Interesting takes on 'transformation' for your haiku Usha, and I like the fact that the first and third lines are interchangeable: that's cool! ;) <3

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  6. So crisp and concise, very meaningul.

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  7. Meaningful especially the first one in teens.

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